For this paper, I spent the most time revising the paragraph where I explain how to make the dish. I received many comments about this part, mentioning how it was like a grocery list of sentences, just telling the reader the recipe rather than showing how my grandmother and I made it. I also spent a lot of time making sure my thesis was well represented throughout the piece, making sure each paragraph built up the thesis and did not stray from the central point of the essay. I don’t think I would change much about the essay or the revision process. The responses given to me about my essay were very thorough and informative, with much more effort put into the critiques than the responses I received in high school. If anything, it would be helpful to have a second workshopping period with an entirely new group. More opinions and views on my essay would be helpful to create a better final product. In previous drafting process, I would have multiple workshopping groups as described, with all new people each time to add more different critiques. However, in the past I did not have an opportunity to have the professor review the essay before I handed it in, which I found very helpful for this paper. In addition, my approach to this project fit my expectations for the class. The majority of my effort in this class was focused on writing and improving the essay, as it is the most important and time consuming assignment given in this course.
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